Its been a while, how are you all doing?
We are moving on to my next topic, Vietnam War/Conflict or in short-hand VW.
And, this essay is going to be a group effort. In my/our group me+Yessica+Nick are forming one group to tackle this VW essay.
This blog is dedicated to my new thesis statement relate to VW.
Here it comes, Vietnam War information was not distributed wide enough audience in the U.S because Vietnam War veterans had difficulty communicating to general public, general public had hard time perceiving and understanding the Vietnam War at the time, and as time passes more and more publications, media outlet were available to generate enough educating to general public that at last general public get to understand the Vietnam War and understood what had happened in Vietnam, and as a consequence of this long time offset some veterans committed suicide and had difficulty finding their social places in the general public atmosphere, yet other veterans who were able to communicate and channel their experiences to some kind of outlet were able to move on to their new lives after the war.
Don't keep your comment to yourself, let me hear from you about my thesis. Thanks.
Ganaa
This is a huge run on sentence, and difficult to understand. May I suggest that you break up the first sentence to read something like this: Vietnam War information was not distributed to a wide enough audience in the U.S because Vietnam War veterans had difficulty communicating to the general public. The general public had a hard time perceiving and understanding the Vietnam War at the given moment.
ReplyDeleteJust a suggestion ... also perhaps some cleaning up of the sentences to follow.
Thanks, Dina, I will definetly work on what you've suggested. :)
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